Plan B Pill Outline

I. Introduction
a. show examples people can relate to
b. state thesis: We as Americans are supposed to have unalienable rights, it is not fair for someone to decide whether a woman should be able to take the Plan B Pill
II. Explain Plan B Pill
a. history of Plan B Pill
b. what the pill does
III. Show counter argument
a. why people think it's wrong
b. common misconceptions
IV. Talk about Pharmacists
a. why they think that have a right to no hand it out
b. other ways of avoiding handing it out
V. My argument
a. why it's ok
b. real reasons for use
c. examples of situations

I think that in my topic, i have some really strong arguments supporting my side, I am having no problem talking about why I think it's right for women to use the pill. But i need to show some of the other sides reasons why they think its not ok. So I need to work on the counterargument a little more.

essay outline

I. Introduction
A. students arent allowed to have roomies of different genders
B. It shouldn't matter what the gender of your roommate is
1. new experience
2. more diverse
3. create problems
II. Support
A. numerous benefits
1. sharing
2. different perspectives
III. Counter
A. distractions
B. jealous significant others
IV. Conclusion
A. better off
B. change some peoples feelings on life


I think I can add more detail about how different sex roommates could be diverse. Also I could include more examples or explain them more throughout my essay. Making my essay for connected and such is something else, I could do to help my essay become better.

Outline

I. Intro
A. Theisis: Guitar Hero is not just another video game. It is a social activity, an easy time filler, promotes hand-eye coordination, and releives stress.
B. Background info
1. Description of game
II. Body
A. Social activity
1. Many rooms have it
2. Open door
3. Guitar Hero friends
B. Time filler, not waste of time
1. 10 mins to fill
2. Do something, not waste time on pointless things
C. Homework distraction
1. Much used technique
2. Many teachers reccomend this method
3. Quick and easy distraction
D. Coordination
1. Personal experience
2. Strength
E. Stress releiver
1. Better than other methods
2. Quick and Easy method
F. Stepping stone
1. Money issue: real vs video game
2. Causes interest in real guitar
III. Conclusion

I desperately need to re-organize my paper, putting the critiques after the good points. I also need more detail in describing the game, need to get rid of all of the "you's", and I need another citation.

life without insurance

I think that her personal experience was a good way to open the essay in a more conversational way. This mode of opening gets the reader some beginning info to get their mind on the topic and lure in interest, then leads to the more serious aspects of the issue. She then states some statistics and raises awareness on the subject, getting her point across.

Jeremiah Knox: Essay #2 Outline

I. Introduction
A. Entire nation in uproar.
B. Started by immature and naive school children.
C. Thesis: The whole Jena Six event seems to have been blown out of proportion.
II. Event overview
A. "white tree"
B. convenience store; stolen shotgun
C. Assault
D. events connected?
III. Federal investigation
A. nooses in tree
1. markings of hate crime
2. not made into a federal case
3. lacked "federal criteria"
B. assault investigation
1. over forty witness accounts
2. no mention of noose incident
C. other incidents
1. no signs of retaliation
2. isolated events
V. Community Reaction
A. nation sees racial injustice
B. Al Sharpton
1. civil rights movement of the 21st century
C. people jumping the gun
VI. Court Reaction
A. original sentence somewhat harsh, but D.A. had reason for such severe punishment
B. ages of boys
1. legal age in Louisiana 17
C. Mychal Bell bail
1. previous assault charges
D. people overreacting to charges
VII. Conclusion
A. school yard prank made by naive school children
B. situation turning into something that it isn't
C. Conclusion sentence: Perhaps if everyone could take a few moments to look at the broader picture, then maybe they would realize that all of these so-called civil rights injustices do not actually exist.




While revising my essay, I realized that I still have a little more work to do in order to fix this essay. I realized that I need to develop my counter argument some more and make it more clear. I also realized that my wording affected how strong my argument was. However, I did realize that despite my wording, I am able to develop a relatively strong argument through examples.

Outline

I. Introduction
A. Background information
B. Explanaition of problem
C. Thesis- The BG1 card should be effective at all locations located within the Bowling Green city limits, so that students do
not have to worry about carrying cash on them to pay for products.
II. Personal Example
A. Wrote about how I learned that I could not use the BG1 card through a personal experience.
III. First Interviewee
A. Quotes and paraphrasing what they said.
IV. Second Interviewee
A. Quotes and paraphrasing what they said.
V.Counter Argument
A. The University will have to make contracts with all of the store and restaurants.
B. It will greatly benefit the University's income.
VI. Cunter Argument
A. The on campus places have to close after some time.
B. There will be people willing to work late/early hours.
VII. Conclusion
A. Solutions to the problem

Outline

I.) Introduction
A.) Observations
B.) Thesis-People have many misconceptions of video games, but in watching and experiencing it first hand, I think that Bowling Green students need to be educated more about what games like World of Warcraft are really about.
II.) Contrary to most it is a good way to make friends.
A.) Allows you to interact with people
B.) Lets Shy people still be able to go out and do what they want
C.) Some students dont like to go out.
III.) Not everyone is addicted
A.) Certain people can play on a small term basis
B.) Addiction is what people make it
IV.) Students should have a place were they can play in peace
A.) Allows them to enjoy a stress free enviroment
B.) Stops ridicule from other students
C.) Allows them to play around people who enjoy the same thing
V.) People against
A.) People who follow stereotypes dont know the difference
B.) People who have never played before
C.) People who base opinions off the things people do
VI.) Conclusion
A.) Students not just in Kreishcer Darrow should be able to play and do as they please without fear. Also students should be more open minded towards peoples opinion of a good time.






As i outlined my paper i noticed i did not have a strong counter argument, or a very strong list of sources. I based my paper mainly off my own opinions and need to give more in depth looks at what other people believe. All in all my paper was difficult to write because it is not as commonly looked at as a problem, but i believe that i can show a new side of somthing to everyone around me.

Outline

I)Intro
A)Observations
B)Thesis-I feel it should not be illegal to download music onto a playlist,it should be free
II)No Cost Involved
A)Accepted way of life for college students
B)Sample Music before buying
C)Prices are too high for a CD
III) Easy Access on Internet
A)Listen to any song
B)Websites
C)Many students involved, risk chances of getting caught
IV) How RIAA is trying to stop it
A)Sent letters to campuses
B)Consequences
V)People against
A)Disobeying law
B)Definition of Copyright
C)Songwriters are suffering too
VI)Why it should be legalized
A)Boost sales
B)Finding obsure/difficult songs
C)Want to hear more so they purchase the CD
VII)Finding other artists
A)Little known musicians
B) helps get music out to the public
VIII)Musicians still make money
A)People still buy CDs
B)Concerts
C)Memrobilia
IX)Conculsion
A)Help increase sales
B)Help little known musicians and increases concert sales of well known musicans
C)RIAA rethinking stand
D)Penn state making it legal
1)Ruckus
a)legal option
b)social network
c)share with others
E) would not be violating law

I wrote this outline after making my changes. I came up with three reasons for free downloading. I changed some paragrphs around and deleted some to help my paper.

comment on changes

I think that when I revise I should focus more on having more details to support my main point. I also think that when I revise I should aim to have more counter points to refute. This will help to strengthen my point more.

Outline

1. Intro

1)Thesis: I believe that the overnight policy...

2)Main Points

2. Education is more than book work

1) Learn from college experiences

2) test new found freedom

3) Lear from mistakes

3. Guest of the same sex can spend the night

a) Homosexuals have an advantage

b) no sex should be allowed to spend the night

4. Counter arguments

a) students are still young

b) first time being away from home for many

c) parents want safety

d) ability to make their own decisions

5. Conclusion

a) restate thesis and main points

Outline

I. Introduction
A. Meal Plan:
1. Bronze - $1,300
2. Silver - $1,600
3. Gold-$1,700
B. Rollover plan - Excess money rolls over into next semesters
C. Thesis: Incoming freshmen should not be required to purchase a meal plan because they
are too expensive, there are limited food places, and it does not cater to all
dietary needs.
II. Too expensive
A. Some may think that thirteen hundred dollars is not a lot of money, but for those
students who are paying their way through college it is.
B. The smallest meal plan is thirteen hundred dollars which does not get used up all the time
and would normally roll over, however the administration is aiming to get rid of the
rollover plan
C. BGSU Office if Residence Life (information of figures)
D. If the rollover is eliminated, students will lose a lot of money that they cannot afford to
waste.
III. Limited locations
A. Some of the dining halls have very odd hours of opertion, which makes it an
inconvenience to students
B. Example: Campus Corners only open 5-8 Monday-Thursday
C. BGSU dining hall hours
D. Most students like to have options of places to eat, but if they have odd operating hours,
the choices are limited
IV. Dietary Needs
A. Some want to eat healthy and not have to go to Wendy's for dinner because it is the only
places open late at night
B. Limited selection of healthy food, salad costs the most money, no nutritional facts ( for
those with allergies)
C. Dining Halls
V. Conclusion
A. We should be able to buy own food from stores which can help us learn responsibility and
independence



After outlining, I realized I need to fix up my conclusion to make sure it summarizes my thesis. I also need to add a counterargument and make sure that all of my examples and points relate back to my thesis. Lastly, I need to make sure I summarize each paragraph with a good sentence or two to wrap up each paragraph.

Life without health insurance-tim fisher

Adding in real life situations to the story greatly helped "Life without Health Insurance." Clark mentions that following college she didn't have the money for health insurance and food, so she picked the more reasonable one, food. So when she got terribley sick, she was in a deep financial crisis. This story definately struck a chord with me because in three years this will be a scenario I could very well have to face. And after reading a first hand account of what could happen without health insurance, I definately now may be more inclined to think about purchasing it.

Life without Health Insurance

I was very touched by this article we read. Clark brings up a topic I believe most Americans feel something needs to be done about: Health Care. I personally believe it is a right, not a privilage. Clarks arguments are very strong and very good. I like how statistics alone, isn't the main argument. Personal experiences are what is used and it really puts on an affect to anyone who is willing to read it.

Life Without Health Insurance

Clark sites statistics that are readily available, and she is making a claim others have already made. Clark's own personal experience adds to this debate by making the argument more real to others. She states facts that have already been said, but by adding in her own personal experience, it really shows that this does happen, and it is not just another statistic. Most people may think by just reading the claim that others made, without personal experience, that it wouldn't happen to them. Therefore, since Clark did put her experience into the argument, it made it seem real, like it could happen to anyone, at least that's how it made me feel. I guess I wouldn't think about health insurance being an issue, but between the ages 18-25 with just starting your life, paying your own bills, it would be hard to afford insurance. Clark's experience with health insurance was very expensive, but like she said she was lucky. To have a chronic illness the bills would be overwhelming.

Life Without Health Insurance

Meredith Clark makes a great claim in her article "Life Without Health Insurance" about how people between the ages of 18 to 25 do not have life insurance. However, Clark's claim in this article has been stated by many other people. What makes Clark's article unique is the fact that she isn't strictly using statistics, she is speaking out of personal experience. Clark has had her own health problems when she was uninsured. Clark's knowledge on the topic comes from personal experience and therefore makes the article more personal and a lot more informative.

Life without health insurance

In the article Life without Health Insurance Clark does a very good job of giving her point of views about the issue. In a lot of debatable topics, people will either just stick to strictly statistics to prove their points, and other will just use their personal experiences to try and get through to the reader. In this article however, Clark uses statistics and her personal experiences, which makes it a lot more believable to the reader. We as the reader feel much more connected to the situation Clark is talking about and find it easier to believe what she is saying because she has provided statistics and her personal experience.

Life without insurance

Her personal experience adds a lot more credibility to this debate. It is one thing for someone to speak on an issue that they believe in, and another thing for someone to speak on an issue that they believe in and have been through. This testimony helps to bring new light onto the situation because she is giving a first hand account of how health insurance has effected her life. People who read this article are more inclined to believe what she is saying because she has gone thought . I think that this testimony was a good addition to the article and makes the argument more valid.

health insurance

By Clark giving her own personal experience about the situation helps us put it in perspective. Reading a story is one thing, but giving an example opens up many new doors. We as the reader can relate to what she has to say. It would also help people become more aware of the statistics because no one is a superhero and everyone has the potential to get sick or injured whether they like it or not. She hit the mark as a writer because without her personal example the essay would just be a little off the mark.

Health Insurance

I think that Clark gives her personal experience along with the statics because it it gives the reader a first hand example that any one can become part of those simple, commonly over looked numbers. She makes the reader feel that health insurance is very important because she gives the affects of what happen to her just from getting a mild illness. Her personal experience also makes the reader more willing to agree with her position if the reader can connect with what the author is saying.

Life Without Health Insurance

I think Clark adding her own experience makes the article more clear to the readers. It shows the readers that is can happen to anyone and can happen when you don't expect it. If she would just put the stats in the article and not put her own experience in it, the article could become boring to some people and they might believe that they won't get sick without insurance.

Health Insurance

Clark's personal experience definately adds validity to the issue. When you read statistics and cold numbers, it is easy to ignore them. It's very easy to say, "That will never happen to me." or to just brush it off as propoganda. When a real person tells a real story, however, it makes the issue come alive. Suddenly we put ourselves in there shoes and everything is much more believable. Clark's personal experience definately helps the article.

Response to Clark article

Clark adds her personal experience into this article to give her readers a firsthand example of how not having insurance can effect someone financially and emotionally. It is a more personal message than simply listing facts and statistics. It gives the audience an insight into the real situation and what is really happening regarding the topic of insurance. It also makes the argument more believable because the readers can actually see how unexpected circumstances can effect someone who does not have insurance.

Life without health insurance Q2

In any paper a personal experience add a sense of individualiy. In this exerpt Clark explains to the audience how a real life experience like this can really happen. If it had just been a written statistic people would not really see the harshness of it. If you show a real account of someone going through something as terrible as having no medical help throughout their life. I believe clark has shown a really hard aspect of her life, and the fact she wrote an entire story about the struggle she went through also shows how strong people can come out in the end.

Clark Response

Clark adds her own personal experience into the mix of the statistics to appeal to the emotions of the audience. Most people walk through life thinking nothing will ever happen to them, which is a little like what Clark did. Once something happened to her, she was out of insurance and had to fight her way back through debt and illness. Her personal experience allows the audience to see that stuff like this really does happen in our world, they are not just statistics, they are real people that go through with these hardships. A real life example helps the reader imagine themselves in the writers situation and get a better perspective on the situation as a whole.

Response to Clark article

2. The statistics Clark cites in her essay are readily available, and she is making a claim others have already made. What does her personal experience add to this debate?

--ejfleitz

Audience-Tim Fisher

The group of people I'm trying to reach with my essay would be those who are familiar with Title IX. I do not try to dumb down my essay to inform those who do not know of Title IX because, frankly, I am not interested in trying to explain this law to them. I do believe this will not be a problem for my fellow English class members due to the fact that I believe all of them to be fairly knowledgeable people who should not have a problem understanding what I am saying. My essay will be brought forth as if everyone is already relatively familiar with Title IX, and I will explain in my opinion why it needs to be changed.

Audience

The audience in my essay is the faculty and students at Bowling Green State University.My audience is good for my topic because my paper is concerning their well being and safety here at BG. They would be aware of certain steps to take in case an emergency happened here and would see maybe some other alternatives to make it even better. They would benefit form it because its very important to then and effects them. I will try and explain what I believe our university should in case an emergency should happen and what tools could be even more useful.

Audience

My audience in this essay is the current students at Bowling Green State University. This audience is specifically suitable to my topic because my paper deals with policy's at their university. They would take the most from this essay because they know and understand the issues that arise on their campus. They would also benefit most from this essay because the issue directly effects them. Some strategies that I will try to employ in this essay is to use real life situations about events on campus so that the audience can better identify them selves with my paper.

Audience

The audience for my essay would be the faculty members that read the BG News. That is because my argument is that the BG1 card should be able to be used at more places off campus. This could also be an interesting topic for the students to read because than maybe more of them would say the same thing to the faculty. I used a more formal type of writing style to help reach the faculty members in a proper way. I have also directly addressed faculty positions in the essay to make it more effective.

Audience

My topic is whether residential BGSU students should be allowed to have pets other than fish in their dorm rooms. My audience is the general on-campus community, including students who live in the residence halls, the President of the University, and those in positions of authority. My essay is especially suitable for this audience because it effects every residential student, even those who do not wish to have pets, because they may have to deal with their roommates or neighbors having pets. Also, those in authority should know how students feel about the topic, and should consider the important points that I bring up in their consideration of this issue. One strategy that I use is to relate the issue directly to situations that students may find themselves in if they were permitted to have other pets on campus.

Audience

The audience in my essay is anyone who might be reading the BG News, particularly BG students. My issue, whether general education classes are a good or bad idea, is relevant to BG students because all BG students are currently required to take general education courses. In the essay, I plan to reach my audience by writing in such a way that I am on the same level as them and will try to reason through it as a BG student. It this way it will feel like they too are reasoning through it along with me.

Audience

My audience is the students that live on campus at Bowling Green because i feel that every student has a part to play in the safety of the community that we live in. I think that that my essay is suitable for my audience is because i feel that everyone on campus wants to be safe and need to understand the importance of campus safety. I feel that addressing the issue and unsafe practice of door propping is a way to open the minds of students that live on campus.

The Audience

The audience I'm addressing in my essay is the entire BGSU community. I think that everyone is impacted by the situation of opposite sex roommates. Everyone whether you're a student, professor, graduate, or just some who knows about Bowling Green would have a opinion on this topic. So I am addressing them because everyone will have a different feeling about what it is I have to say, and the issue of different gendered roommates.

Jeremiah Knox: My Audience

My paper is mainly geared towards those people who are interested in the Jena Six incident. Although my paper can be read by all, I guess that my paper is geared more towards civil rights activists that are interested in the Jena Six issue. My paper is good for this audience because it brings attention to issues that civil rights activists would be interested in. My paper is also appropriate for this audience because the readers could compare their ideas af the whole situation and then either argue my paper or change their view of the situation.

Audience

My audience is the president of BGSU, Sidney A. Ribeau. The reason for this, is because my topic is about overnight guest, who are the opposite sex. In my paper I try to persuade the president of BGSU into seeing that it is a good idea to allow opposite sex overnight guest. I show the good side of the issue, and how it will help with values for the future. Also, I show the problems other people might have with the issue, such as an RA or the president himself. Basically, I show both the pro's and con's of the situation. My best strategy is to show how he sets aside a whole weekend for our siblings, with events everyday, but yet he does not allow them to stay if they are the opposite sex.

Audience

The topic of my essay is downloading music. The audience would be all college students since most have Ipods or some form of MP3 player and they are the main age group that downloads free music. I think feel that downloading music should not be illegal. I talk about how college students don't want to spend money on a CD and there is no cost involved in downloading. I also mention why people think downloading free music illegally is wrong. I talk about how free downloading of music should be legalized and the reasons why it should be.

The Audience of my Essay

The Audience of my essay would be anyone who has a misconception about the Plan B Pill, or anyone who is just confused about what it really is. My essay talks about what the pill really does and who might have reason to want to use it. In my essay I was sure to talk about both sides of the argument, why some people might have a problem with it, and then why people dont think there is anything wrong with it. In my essay I am trying to show people what the pill really does, and why people should not think badly of women who might make the choice to use the pill.

My audience Essay

When i began my article i started off looking through both perspectives. My essay is responding to the growing amount of people who play world of warcraft, along with the amount of teens that completely degrade people for playing it. I found this topic interesting because i myself play this game, but not to the same degree many others do. There are two kids on my floor that are refered to as WoW nerds, and to me that is a completely unnecessary name. We dont go around calling people football nerds or guitar nerds when they are good at something do we? The audience i chose was teenagers on a college campus, to inform them that maybe because someone is playing a video games, doesnt necessarily consitute them as a nerd.

Another reason i chose this as my audience comes from the initial reaction i got when people found out I played wow. Students seemed interested at first but once i tried to explain to them what the game was about, it seemed like they shunned me for playing it. If i can convince at least a few people to watch how they respond to kids who play video games, i will have served my purpose.

My essay's audience is BG students. Since guitar hero is a growing thing on campus here as well as many other places, the audience could be any college students, but my particular audience is BG students. In my hall and many others here in BG, guitar hero can be heard many times throughout the day. I address my audience in an im-just-like-you way, using specific examples of the times of day that most students have in between classes when there is not enough time to start a homework assignment, but too much time to just sit around.

Response: Audience for Essay #2

Who is your audience for this essay? In a posting, give us an overview of who your audience is, reasoning why this issue is so suitable for this audience, and finally give one example of how you addressed your audience in this draft.

--elizabeth

Essay continued

I forgot to add that my paper is suitable for the intended audience because it involves them. The adminsitration is the ones who are trying to eliminate the rollover plans and we, the students, are directly affected by the loss of money.

Essay

The directed audience of my paper is the BGSU administration and the students of BGSU. My essay discusses the expensive meal plans and how we should not be forced to purchase one and if we are forced to, our money should rollover. One way i paid attention to my audience was by citing a fellow student. Their opinion gives credibility to my essay and shows that most students are alike in the fact that we want more of a selection for food, some more healthy food, and our money to rollover to future semesters. Allowing the audience to take an active participation in the essay elminates some biases and keeps them reading.

Hillary vs. Grand Theft Auto

Johnson's position on video games is ridiculous. He believes that the rising popularity in video games has had a positive effect on today's youth. He points to crime rates, SAT scores, and even the declining rate in hijacked cars as evidence to support his point. He uses all these arguments to go against Clinton's argument for controlling video games. Johnson believes that the investigation is as ridiculous as an investigation on the raising rate of crime due to football. Johnson believe that video games are a mental outlet for children, while Clinton argues that they influence our youth to do the bad things that they see in video games. Johnson also believes that the growing rate of children who are playing video games is a direct correlation to the times. Johnson saids that because our world is becoming more and more technological, children will be better equipped for the changing work force. I do not agree with Johnson's arguments because they are based on bias facts and he is fabricating information and facts to further advance his point.

Clinton vs. grand theft auto

The author is a business man defending his product against the poilitician who wants to strengthen the rating which would bring down the sales, decreasing the profit for him. So of course he would take a stance against the critiques Hillary Clinton has for grand theft auto where he states that she overlooks the game noticing only the terrible things and not the good side. Although it may need a stronger rating, perhaps mature, she fails to notice that there is no real evidence that games that have stealing, or killing has any effect on the gamers or real crime, but in the last year or so crime has decreased. He supports his product by countering her assumptions by even mentioning that in truth the game is a healthy let out for the gamers to experience all of this in the game, to be sastified and not do in reality.

Letter to Clinton-Tim Fisher

The letter written to senator Clinton was way off base, and also poorly written. I originally agreed with Johnson's assesment that the senator was incorrect in researching the effects of video game violence affecting young children. However, he then began to randomly throw out ideas into his letter, some of which he never even concluded. For instance, he begins discussing how football helps foster violence in children. I didn't agree with this assesment, but I would have been interested in hearing his points. He never finished these points though, and it greatly took away from any possible influence this letter would have had on anyone. All in all, this was a very poorly written letter that completely misses the boat.

Johnson has a lot of problems with what Senator Clinton had to say. I believed his strongest arguement against her was the fact that violence actually has gone down since Grand Theft Auto has come out. As strange as that might be, maybe the fact that people can do harm in a video game actually helps society. He also brings up a point about High School Football. It is something many many kids are involved in, and he make a valid point at how kids are taught to somewhat hurt the other kid on the other team. Th points definately make you think.

Hillary Vs. GTA

Johnson finds many things wrong with Senator Clinton's argument for controlling video games. He mentions that the video games give the minds of the kids playing them more of a "work out". He says that it is better to think about managing a team in the madden video game than to sit on the couch and cheer for a team. He also states that crime rates have dropped since that games have arrived on the shelves. Finally, he mentions the fact that since "Grand Theft Auto" has come out there has been an extreme fall in crime rates.

Hillary Vs. Grand Theft Auto....hmmm

In reading this article, my main conscern is the problem that comes from parents. Johnson points out very well that the sex in the game should give it a mature rating, and that should be the end of it. After pointing out many other games that are also violent or sexual, Johnson gets his point across by showing how these games may actually benefit our society. The fact that the violence that can be taken out during video games actually seems to be pretty accurate. Seeing as how i play certain games when im very angry and wish to vent some of that anger towards something that wont hurt anyone.

Another part of the letter that stands out to me againts Sen. Clinton's point is dervived from the little knowledge that parents have about the games that THEY are buying for their kids. How can a parent get angry at a game company when it was their own negligence that caused the violence to be displayed. I do think that at the end of this letter he should leave out the part he agrees with, because it takes away for the focus he had at the beginning of the paper.

-matt

Hilary vs. Grand Theft Auto

I think that this article by Johnson as a rebuttal to the Clinton Administration's 90 million dollar study on the effects that video games have on children and the recent stand that Clinton took against the game Grand Theft Auto. I don't remember this situation but I can infer that this project is against video games and that Clinton must have made some stand saying that Grand Theft Auto was distructive to young minds. I think Johnson is telling Clinton that it is stupid to look at something like a violent video game and to blindly look at the bad things it causes without considering any possible good things. Clinton has not considered that the game allows kids to explore the thrill of stealing cars without actually stealing one. Instead Clinton sees the game as teaching kids it is fun and ok to steal. The interesting fact are, however, that since the games release, the crime rate for grand theft auto has decreased. Clinton, of course, has not considered this.

Johnson v. Hillary

Johnson's argument was that video games are actually a good part of children's lives. He feels that Hillary's argument is wrong because it is only focusing on one video game and the violence that it involved with it. Johnson opposes what Hillary is saying by providing facts and statics of way he feels that video games are good for the development of children and teenagers. he also states the fact that today's video games have just replaced the games of past generations. Johnson is giving all possible reason for his argument and justifying playing video games.

Hillary vs GTA

Johnson finds a lot of things wrong with Sen. Clinton's argument on video games. He begins by saying that there are more dangerous things going on in the world than a teenage boy sitting around playing video games. He states facts and statistics about certain areas have thrived, like SAT scores and verbal scores have been off the charts since GTA or other violent video games have been out. He also asks Hillary to check herself becasue they're so many benefits from video games that aren't violent and he points those out. He basically took everything Hillary said and disagreed with it and gave reasons why though facts which was very effective.

Hillary vs. Grand Theft Auto

What Johnson finds wrong with senator Clinton's argument for controlling video games is that he is taking the wrong approach to it. Senator Clinton is spending money and doing research on these video games, when he should be spending money and doing research on other things, such as football or t.v.

Johnson shows that in statistics, the crime rate and the "thrill-seeking" crimes have decreased since these video games have come out. So, instead of the children committing these criminal acts in real life, they can do them in a video game. Also, Johnson states the fact that SAT scores have gone up, and report cards have also been higher.

Johnson says that the skills a child needs to learn how to do in real life, are those skills that they learn by playing video games. It is no longer just hand and eye coordination, but it is so much more. The children now have to learn complex rule systems, master challenging new interfaces, follow dozens of shifting variables in real time and prioritize between multiple objectives. These are very good points that Johnson states. They are things that will go further than the video game and into their real life.

Johnson also states the facts that video games are the reason for child obesity. So, Senator Clinton could argue about that but he doesn't. But then she also says that homework is not exercise either.

Johnson just doesn't agree with the way Senator Clinton is going about the video game situation at all. So with his writing the argumentative essay should help him see the good sides of video games, and maybe make him more interested in football or t.v.

One thing I believe that would have been good in Johnson's essay would have been the fact that the parents are normally the ones who buy these video games. Every video game has a rating on the back cover saying what it includes, such as violence or sex. So, if the parents have problems with these games then why are they buying them?

-Brittany

Johnson v.s. Hillary Clinton

Johnson feels that Senator Hillary Clinton is taking the wrong approach to the video game situation. Johnson thinks that if Senator Clinton forces the censorship of video games, then some very helpful tools will be taken out of the hands of today's youth. Johnson states that the skills that video games teach children are, "precisely the sorts of skills that they're going to need in the digital workplace of tomorrow." All of the skills that children learn in video games (i.e. hand-eye coordination, complex rule systems, learning to interface with new interfaces, etc.) could help them in the future. Johnson says that if Hillary Clinton censors video games, then she will inevitably take away a useful tool for children to develop needed skills.

Johnson: Hillary vs. Grand Theft Auto

Johnson argues that video games are just today's version of popular games for children. He doesn't see any harm in them and says that it makes no sense to investigate them. As long as they are rated appropriately, they are fine. He describes all the benefits that children gain by playing video games as opposed to other activities that they could be involved in.

Hillary vs. Grand Theft Auto

In Johnson's argument he points out some really good facts about Hillary arguing that video games are bad for children. When you first think about video games you would probably be more likely to agree with the things that Sen. Clinton states, but after reading Johnson's argument it is almost impossible not to agree with him. Johnson points out that even though kids sit there all day and play video games, in many ways the video games are preparing kids to be able to handle situations that they will be confronted with when they are older. At least by playing the games they can learn techniques for certain things, instead of just sitting in front of the tv all day. And as Johnson pointed out, you dont get any exercise from just sitting and doing homework either.

Hillary vs. Grand Theft Auto

Johnson finds many things wrong with Sen. Clinton's argument for controlling video games. He thinks there are worse things for kids to do than video games including football because of the aggressiveness involved. He thinks video games help the kids mentally. Some examples are the hand-eye coordination and learning the skills that could help them in the future. He says video games let children clear their minds and explore instead of taking it out on a person. He agrees with her on the subject that children do not get enough exercise but that is the only thing.

Hillary vs. Grand Theft Auto

Johnson finds many things wrong with Hillary's arguments for controlling video games. One of Johnson's first main arguments is that Clinton is overlooking some of teh real-life dangerous acts of violence, like football. Kids are constantly fighting, betting and doing other things with football that is more harmful to them than any video game. Video games are like a safe haven for many kids, they can express their anger in a non-violent way that does not hurt anyone else but a character in a video game. Video games actually stimulate hand eye coordination, help kids with memorizing, and allow them to be in charge of things that they do. For example, they have to do a lot of memorization of codes for certain moves and learning how to set up their own plays. Video games are beneficial to kids, with the exception of the lack of exercise. However, like Johnson points out, homework does not help with the obesity and lack of exercise problem either.

Johnson vs. Hillary

Johnson finds a lot wrong with Hillary's argument for controlling video games. In fact, the only thing that he agrees with is that kids are not getting excercise from them, but even then he gives a good point that reading or doing homework is not getting kids excercise either. He thinks the overall idea for controlling video games is silly aswell, because more violence is found in football players than kids who like video games. Video games actually provide an outlet for most kids, so instead of provoking violent behavior video games are preventing a lot of people from actually going out and doing things like stealing cars. This is one of the many good points Johnson made in his letter, and I fully agree with absolutely everything he said. I couldn't have said it better myself.

Hillary vs. Grand Theft Auto

1. Position arguments are sometimes written as rebuttals to the position arguments of others. What exactly does Johnson find wrong with Senator Clinton's argument for controlling video games?

--ejfleitz

Fourth of July-Tim Fisher

I've never read anything from Frederick Douglass before, but I must say that I greatly enjoyed his fire and brimstone speaking methods. While he have only been speaking in front of a ladies anti-slavery society, that didn't change his speaking methods at all. He spoke as if he were speaking to our country's leaders, and he let them have it. He was all business in the speech, and he was ready for a fight.

Frederick Douglas

I found his way of saying how a slave is not a human to be very interesting and very good. He makes the other side, put them in his shoes as best as he can. He tries to make you feel like what a former slave might feel on the 4th of July. Its a day that can actually cause pain instead of normally the joy we feel. I thought it was a very effective way to make his point

I amire Fredrick Douglas's courage to speak about something he was very passionate about no matter what kind of backlash was to be expected. He was able to bring to attention how ironic the celebrations of the fourth of july is to commemorate liberty for all men of america, and yet there is slavery abound across the nation. He also sheds light on how the slaves had felt on those celebrations of how brutal and harsh their lives are belittled by the american man that supports the liberty of all man kind.

4th of July response

I think he spends much of his time on the topics that do not need to be argued because it gives the reader another side of the story. It gives them something to compare his arguments to, so it is not just him telling his audience what he thinks. These points also make his essay better because he is able to give good counter arguments towards those topics that do not need to be argued.

Slaves on the 4th

I believe that Douglass spends so much time argueing points that are common knowledge to everyone because at the time they were still being ignored. People "believed" in the fact that all men were created equal, but for some reason they didn't view slaves that way. His purpose was to inform people that they were being hippocrites, claiming they loved freedom and sitting back as slaves worked for them. It may seem pointless to argue these points, but in reality it was what the people needed to hear.

Douglass response

Douglass spends most of this excerpt convincing his audience that slavery is wrong and should be abolished. He is arguing that slaves should have the same rights as any other citizens, especially freedom. While most Americans were celebrating their independence, Douglass fought for the point that slaves, his own people, had nothing to celebrate. While most of his arguments seem like common knowledge, he is trying to make the public realize that if these truths are absolute, then slavery should be abolished without question.

What to the slave is the fourth of July?

I think that Douglass spends so much time talking about these points because, the situation is full of irony. We as a country do spend so much time celebrating our freedom and liberty, when in reality it wasn't until some what recently if you think about it that everyone did have the pleasure of enjoying their freedoms. There was so much time when so many people were denied the rights that we take for granted today. Douglass is trying to show that in many ways it's so ironic that we celebrate our freedoms with so much enthusiasm because people were denied freedoms for so long. We forget sometimes everything that people have gone through in order to enjoy freedom, Douglass speech is a reality check, and a reminder of things our country has gone through.

Douglass

I think Dogulass spends all that time talking about slavery what not because no one else is. Everyone feels the same way about those issues its just no one has the courage to say whats on their mind and try to do something about it. I think by him talking about it in front of people on the Fourth of July it will help people be more aware of the issue. I also think it helps he gave the speech on that day than any other day because the day is about independence and freedom, yet everyone isn't free, and everyone doesn't have their independence. The speech hits closer to home because everyone is rejoicing and celebrating while he points out that some people can't rejoice about anything because they are viewed as property and not free people.

What to the slave is the fourth of July?

I think Douglass spends time talking about the points that don't need to be argued because everyone knows the points but they are looked over by many. The slaves did not feel free and did not have the freedom as everyone else. They were pushed around by everyone. Douglass is talking about the points because even though everyone is supposed to be treated as equals the slaves were not. The fourth of July to them is just reminding them of how they used to be treated.

What to the Slave Is the Fourth of July?

In the oration by Fredrick Douglass, he spends considerable time telling his audience what points do not need to be argued: that a slave is human, that man is entitled to liberty, and so on. I believe that Douglass spends so much time talking about them, because he feels it is something that everyone should agree on. These points should be common sense to the audience.
Douglass does not want to argue about something that should be known by everyone already. He does not see the point in it. When these points come up he says that they are already conceded in the Declaration of Independence. The United Stats has already declared that slavery was wrong, so therefore, the argument has already won. So he does not see why he needs to argue something that has already won, unless someone were to challenge the idea of one of these points.
To Douglass the fourth of July is a mockery to him, and to those like him. As Americans celebrate the fourth of July, to him, it is a reminder of how he and those like him use to live. He believes that America is false, it always has been, and it always will be. So he feels like it is inhuman for Americans to celebrate on this day.

--Brittany

Jeremiah Knox: "What to the Slave is the Fourth of July?"

I think that Douglas spends so much time telling his audience what points don't need to be argued because he feels that these points, which Douglas argues that these points should be known by all, are not actually viewed by all. I think that he spends so much time on these points because he is trying to point out that these liberties are not viewed with respect by all. This speech takes place during the international slave trade in the United States. During this time, many people did not appeal to the idea of slaves being equal to themselves, especially people in the south. Douglas is emphasizing the point that at this juncture in time, the slaves were not treated as men and the irony and hypocrisy of the phrase in the Declaration of Independence, "All men are created equal."

What to the Slave is the Fourth of July?

Douglass spends time saying that the many of the obvious points of life like man is entitled to liberty and slaves are human need not be described in further detail because all people know of these rights, or do they? He says that they don't need to be mentioned because all should know that we are all God's people, put here for a reason, and should be treated and respected as equal people. He has to go into detail with these points because despite the fact that many people know of these rights, they do not put them into practice. If all humans know of these rights and respect them then why was there slaves? Douglass is trying to instill in the readers' minds that we are all God's people and we should all be treated with the dignity and respect we are guaranteed in the Declaration of Independence. There is a big difference between knowing what is right and doing what is right. Many people have the right morals but when it comes time to put them into practice, they tend to follow the crowd and do the thing they know is wrong.

The Fourth if July: Morgan Mingo

Douglas doesn't argue the pints of slavery because it is a known truth that slavery is wrong and should not occur. Douglas's aim in the speech is not to argue whether slavery is right or wrong, it is to get other Americans to to realize the damage the have done and to show them that their actions are not acceptable. He does this by recalling the christian faith this nation was brought up on, and to recall the history of our nation and how the colonist fought the English to be free. He is trying to get the people to realize that slaver is wrong, but the people who let it be and continue to go on are just as responsible as slave owners.

Fourth of July

Everyone knows these things are true, and instead of arguing why everyone should be equal, he argues how they are not equal. He spends so much time talking about them to emphasize how these things were not true at the time. Then after that, he tells stories of slave trade that are so vivid that the statements that are agreed upon by all now seem silly. It even sort of makes the reader ashamed that they agreed with these statements when it is so obvious that at the time they were false.

Douglass Argument--"What to the Slave is the Fourth of July?"

1. Douglass spends considerable time telling his audience what points do not need to be argued: that a slave is a human, that man is entitled to liberty, and so on. If in fact these points are agreed on by all, why do you think Douglass spends so much time talking about them?

Post a 1-2 paragraph response by the beginning of class time on Friday, and also comment on one peer's posting.

--ejfleitz

Essay-tim fisher

This essay was a great description of what a high school cafeteria is. Since recess no longer happened in most high schools, lunch and time in the cafeteria kind of became recess. It was a time to catch up with friends, and to laugh and have a good time. While reading this essay I was flooded with the memories of high school lunches, and it depressed knowing that I would never experience that again.

I enjoyed the sample essay because I could make comparisons of my high school lunch to hers in Slavania. It was if I was having a flashback rembering all the details of the cafeteria including all the groups that sat together, the feeling of the first day, and the long time friendships built up from elementry school of packed lunches. It was a very entertaining and engaging topic.